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Default Re: Redone my website

Hi IncredibleCo,

I'll kick this one off by saying that I love the clean lines, but feel that you are missing a clear and compelling call to action.

If I were you, I'd look to make the kind of impact that you have with the site you created for Thunder Training.

Secondly, in the SheOak College site in your portfolio, I'd insert some real text into the bubble that currently says something like "You can insert your own text here".

I'll be interested to hear what everyone else has to say too.

Good luck with your review,
Jayne
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