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ok Linda,

IncredibleCo stole my thunder with his suggestion... full marks to him.

So let's look at copy... here's what you lead with...

Hello and welcome to gen Y advantage
Running a business is hard work - there are so many things to consider and stay on top of. What's even more frustrating? Websites, emails, blogs, Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn - the computer! There are so many tools and programs out there that are the 'buzz' at the moment that's a 'MUST' do for business and is enough to give anyone a headache (gen Y or not).

You've outlined the problem but then stopped.

Why wouldn't you follow with two or three appropriate lines re there is an easy solution for Facebook and have a click through to your product... T J Madigan was on the money when he said you don't have a call to action... that is, to your product.

PS. lay this opening paragraph out... maybe bullets... it's too tight

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Thanks Warren! Changed and changed.

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