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Join Date: Dec 2008
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| | Re: Website and Marketing Review Please
IncredibleCo stole my thunder with his suggestion... full marks to him.
So let's look at copy... here's what you lead with...
Hello and welcome to gen Y advantage
Running a business is hard work - there are so many things to consider and stay on top of. What's even more frustrating? Websites, emails, blogs, Facebook, Twitter, LinkedIn - the computer! There are so many tools and programs out there that are the 'buzz' at the moment that's a 'MUST' do for business and is enough to give anyone a headache (gen Y or not).
You've outlined the problem but then stopped.
Why wouldn't you follow with two or three appropriate lines re there is an easy solution for Facebook and have a click through to your product... T J Madigan was on the money when he said you don't have a call to action... that is, to your product.
PS. lay this opening paragraph out... maybe bullets... it's too tight