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Alex Honey: Int Design
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Hi
Random input.

I would go the first option noted below.

From a fresh set of eyes reading the text, I’d seriously consider going for the dot point option Wendy suggested. While I may not be your target market I do know that the copy you have is pretty dense reading.

On top, of everything I think it’s in the running for the longest sentence awards.

Good luck with everything.

LemonChip, post: 78946 wrote:
Right so you could write…

“At Condor Creative we provide a vast array of services including web design & website redesign, wep application development, ecommerce website design for online stores, and content management systems, not to mention iPhone, iPad & Android App Development”

or maybe

“At Condor Creative our vast array of services not only includes web design & website redesign, wep application development, ecommerce website design for online stores, and content management systems, but also iPhone, iPad & Android App Development”