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Just for fun, I would re-write the below paragraph in this way:
Impressive Antiqued Harmony Necklace, Artisan handcrafted in Bali in Antiqued 925 Sterling Silver featuring beautiful very detailed ornate Balinese symbols designs on the Harmony Ball pendant that houses an internal Chime Ball which creates a beautiful soothing soft chiming sound with movement
MY VERSION — A Beautiful Gift for a Mother-to-Be
Imagine the oohs and aahs of your friend when she moves and first hears the soft and soothing chime of her new gift. This handcrafted, Antiqued Sterling Silver (925) necklace features very ornate Balinese symbols on its Harmony Ball pendant. The clever internal Chime Ball creates this beautiful chiming sound whenever the mother-to-be moves.
Don’t say too much in one go. I also suggest to boost the line spacing to 1.3 for easier reading.