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    alawrence
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    Hi All,

    Please review our new business website at http://www.justslushy.com.au

    We’ve done a ‘soft launch’ before going all guns blazing. We’re part of a bigger company but looking to push our slushy machines in the Sydney area and have set this up for that purpose.

    Feedback welcomed :)

    Thanks in advance

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    Dave Gillen – Former FS Concierge
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    Hi there,

    Welcome to Flying Solo!

    If you scroll to the top of this page you’ll see some guidelines for seeking feedback. If you’re able to provide these details then forum members will be more inclined to help out, and the feedback will be more useful.

    Good luck, and great to have you here. :)

    Dave

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    Craig_Longmuir
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    I think the site is ok on the whole, but to make it much nicer I think you need to format the content a bit better. Fonts/colours/images can all be improved…looks a bit like a word doc dropped into the page as is…

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    MatthewKeath
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    I would be the contact details in a much more obvious location – I had to hunt to find.

    Also, look at the fonts and images as Craig suggests. Also look at a better background rather than the tiled image you currently have.

    The copy needs some work. The main headline:

    FREE PRODUCT PAYS FOR YOUR SLUSHY MACHINE

    Doesn’t make much sense.

    Good luck with it all!

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    ShadowPro
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    I agree with comments above.

    Also consider trying to make the first bit of copy about your customer not your product.

    What problem or need of the customer are you satisfying?

    e.g – Are you sick and tired of serving hot and sweaty customers?

    or – Customers looking hot and bothered? Sweat dripping all over your work surfaces?

    You need a Slushy Machine!

    :D

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